Hi Oliver -
I did see the message, and things looked fine to me. I didn't see any
outstanding questions, so didn't reply - apologies. No need to wait on
me before revising.
RjS
On 10/12/20 8:35 AM, Olivier Gimenez wrote:
Hi Robert,
Did you see those answers ? Do you want to review them before we
publish an new ID ?
Thank you
Olivier
*From:*Olivier Gimenez
*Sent:* 05 October 2020 11:54
*To:* 'Robert Sparks' <rjspa...@nostrum.com>; gen-art@ietf.org
*Cc:* lp-...@ietf.org; last-c...@ietf.org;
draft-ietf-lpwan-schc-over-lorawan....@ietf.org
*Subject:* RE: Genart last call review of
draft-ietf-lpwan-schc-over-lorawan-10
Dear Robert,
Thank you for your review. I answered in your email.
Olivier
> -----Original Message-----
> From: Robert Sparks via Datatracker <nore...@ietf.org
<mailto:nore...@ietf.org>>
> The abstract says "This is called a profile." It would be better to say
> something like "This document specifies a profile of RFC8724."
I changed the paragraph to the following (commit f6a3ca7
<https://github.com/Acklio/schc-over-lorawan/pull/35/commits/f6a3ca7af50f1c468ad7171c4911760434567808>):
This document specifies a profile of [RFC8724] to use SCHC in LoRaWAN
networks,
and provides elements such as efficient parameterization and modes of
operation.
> What does "other Internet networks" mean? Please replace the phrase with
> something more descriptive.
Thanks, I rephrased it for: (commit 94823f8
<https://github.com/Acklio/schc-over-lorawan/pull/35/commits/94823f864f4e42c6a0ed934bd0e59864cf22e701>)
SCHC provides a generic framework that enables those devices to
communicate on
IP networks.
> The word "efficient" in the last sentence of the introduction is
puzzling.
> Could it simply be removed?
Ok (commit 94823f8
<https://github.com/Acklio/schc-over-lorawan/pull/35/commits/94823f864f4e42c6a0ed934bd0e59864cf22e701>)
> As the shepherd report notes, there are figures that need to be
reworked to
> satisfy column constraints.
Fixed in 8ce2196
<https://github.com/Acklio/schc-over-lorawan/pull/35/commits/8ce2196a301a0072c791df1363655453b750eee8>
(Also fixes informative RFC which are not normative)
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