Meral, thanks for your review. All, thanks for your responses. I entered a No Objection ballot.
Alissa > On Jun 27, 2020, at 4:08 AM, mohamed.boucad...@orange.com wrote: > > Hi Meral, > > Thank you for the review. > > Please see inline. > > Cheers, > Med > > De : Meral Shirazipour [mailto:meral.shirazip...@ericsson.com > <mailto:meral.shirazip...@ericsson.com>] > Envoyé : samedi 27 juin 2020 08:13 > À : draft-ietf-i2rs-yang-l2-network-topology....@ietf.org > <mailto:draft-ietf-i2rs-yang-l2-network-topology....@ietf.org>; > gen-art@ietf.org <mailto:gen-art@ietf.org> > Objet : Re: Gen-ART Last Call review of > draft-ietf-i2rs-yang-l2-network-topology-13 > > I am the assigned Gen-ART reviewer for this draft. The General Area Review > Team (Gen-ART) reviews all IETF documents being processed by the IESG for the > IETF Chair. Please treat these comments just like any other last call > comments. > > For more information, please see the FAQ at > <https://trac.ietf.org/trac/gen/wiki/GenArtfaq > <https://trac.ietf.org/trac/gen/wiki/GenArtfaq>>. > > Document: draft-ietf-i2rs-yang-l2-network-topology-13 > > Reviewer: Meral Shirazipour > Review Date: 2020-*06-26 > IETF LC End Date: 2020-*06-25 > IESG Telechat date: NA > > > Summary: This draft is ready to be published as Standards Track RFC but I > have some comments. > > > Major issues: > > > Minor issues: > Is it possible to add in the abstract and or intro where the info of the > topology information is to be used? > Maybe borrowing some text from RFC8345. > > [Med] We have already updated the abstract as per a comment from Stig. See. > https://github.com/boucadair/draft-ietf-i2rs-yang-l2-network-topology/blob/master/draft-ietf-i2rs-yang-l2-network-topology-14.txt > > <https://github.com/boucadair/draft-ietf-i2rs-yang-l2-network-topology/blob/master/draft-ietf-i2rs-yang-l2-network-topology-14.txt>. > We will see how to make it better. > > Nits/editorial comments: > [Page 21], Section 6, "NMDA-complient"---->"NMDA-compliant" > > [Med] Thanks. FYI, we will remove that paragraph to better structure the > security section in light of the comments from the secdir. > > Best Regards, > Meral > --- > Meral Shirazipour > Ericsson > Research > www.ericsson.com <http://www.ericsson.com/> > > _________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________ > > Ce message et ses pieces jointes peuvent contenir des informations > confidentielles ou privilegiees et ne doivent donc > pas etre diffuses, exploites ou copies sans autorisation. Si vous avez recu > ce message par erreur, veuillez le signaler > a l'expediteur et le detruire ainsi que les pieces jointes. Les messages > electroniques etant susceptibles d'alteration, > Orange decline toute responsabilite si ce message a ete altere, deforme ou > falsifie. Merci. > > This message and its attachments may contain confidential or privileged > information that may be protected by law; > they should not be distributed, used or copied without authorisation. > If you have received this email in error, please notify the sender and delete > this message and its attachments. > As emails may be altered, Orange is not liable for messages that have been > modified, changed or falsified. > Thank you. > _______________________________________________ > Gen-art mailing list > Gen-art@ietf.org <mailto:Gen-art@ietf.org> > https://www.ietf.org/mailman/listinfo/gen-art > <https://www.ietf.org/mailman/listinfo/gen-art>
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