Linda, thanks for your review. Christer, thanks for your response. I entered a No Objection ballot.
Alissa > On Apr 14, 2020, at 2:41 PM, Linda Dunbar <linda.dun...@futurewei.com> wrote: > > Christer, > > Thank you for the quick response. Your updated wording are much more clear. > > Linda > > -----Original Message----- > From: Christer Holmberg <christer.holmb...@ericsson.com> > Sent: Tuesday, April 14, 2020 9:25 AM > To: Linda Dunbar <linda.dun...@futurewei.com>; gen-art@ietf.org > Subject: Re: [Gen-art] Genart last call review of > draft-ietf-sipcore-sip-token-authnz-12 > > Hi Linda, > > Thank You for the review! Please see inline. > >> Section 1.4.1: the first paragraph is very confusing. The steps after the >> figure is much clear on what to be done. It is better to delete the the >> sub-phrase "... where the registrar informs the UAC about the >> authorization ... >> ". The actual step is actually the UAC sends the request to Registrar and >> get >> the response .. as described in the steps after the Figure. > > The purpose of the first sentence is to highlight the difference between > 1.4.1 and 1.4.2: In 1.4.1 we describe the case where Registrars informs the > UAC about the AS, while in 1.4.2 we describe the case where the AS is > preconfigured in the UAC. > > However, I do agree that the sentence is very long and confusing. Perhaps we > could remove the "in a 401 response to the REGISTER request" part? > > --- > >> Section 2.1.2 the paragraph before the last one (Page 8), I can' parse the >> sentence. What do you want to say? > > I assume you mean Section 2.1.1? > >> "If the UAC receives a 401/407 response with multiple WWWAuthenticate/ >> Proxy-Authenticate header fields, providing challenges >> using different authentication schemes for the same realm, the UAC >> provides credentials for one or more of the schemes that it supports, >> based on local policy." > > We want to say that, if the UAC receives multiple challenges, with different > authentication schemes, for the same realm, the UAC picks one (and provides > credentials) based on local policy. > > Would it be more clear if we said something like: > > "....for the same realm, the UAC selects one or more of the provided schemes > (based on local policy) and provides credentials for those schemes." > > --- > >> Section 2.1.3: What is AOR? > > Address-of-Record. > > We will enhance the abbreviation, and add a reference to RFC 3261. > > --- > > Regards, > > Christer > > > > _______________________________________________ > Gen-art mailing list > Gen-art@ietf.org > https://www.ietf.org/mailman/listinfo/gen-art _______________________________________________ Gen-art mailing list Gen-art@ietf.org https://www.ietf.org/mailman/listinfo/gen-art
