There is a typo in section 3. "(though ISOC employees may independently continue to make technical --> contributuins <-- as individuals)"
thanks, Rob On Thu, Aug 22, 2019 at 12:08 PM Livingood, Jason < [email protected]> wrote: > Thanks - all of that resolved in a -06 update to post shortly! > > Jason > > On 8/4/19, 1:38 PM, "Peter Yee via Datatracker" <[email protected]> wrote: > > Reviewer: Peter Yee > Review result: Ready with Nits > > I am the assigned Gen-ART reviewer for this draft. The General Area > Review Team (Gen-ART) reviews all IETF documents being processed > by the IESG for the IETF Chair. Please treat these comments just > like any other last call comments. > > For more information, please see the FAQ at > > <https://trac.ietf.org/trac/gen/wiki/GenArtfaq>. > > Document: draft-ietf-iasa2-rfc2031bis-05 > Reviewer: Peter Yee > Review Date: 2019-08-04 > IETF LC End Date: 2019-08-05 > IESG Telechat date: Not scheduled for a telechat > > Summary: This draft updates RFC 2031 (The IETF-ISOC Relationship) in > light of > the IASA2 changes. To the extent of that I've followed these changes, > the > draft appears to capture my understanding of the current relationship, > at least > as it is envisaged by the two parties. Whether that's how things > really > operate could probably be the subject of an extensive debate on the > IETF > mailing list. ;-) [Ready with nits] > > Major issues: None > > Minor issues: None > > Nits/editorial comments: > > Page 3, last paragraph before section 2, first sentence: delete a > redundant > "the". > > Page 3, last paragraph before section 2, last sentence: remove the > spaces in > "IETF - ISOC". > > Page 5, section 6, first paragraph, first sentence: change "The" to > "the". As > far as I can tell the ISOC's official name is "Internet Society" > without a > capitalized "The" and uses "the" when using the name in sentences. > > Page 5, section 6, second paragraph, last sentence: change "board of > trustees" > to "Board of Trustees" to match ISOC's usage. > > Page 5, section 7, first paragraph, third sentence: change "board of > trustees" > to "Board of Trustees". > > Page 5, section 7, first paragraph, last sentence: change "arms > length" to > "arm's length". > > > >
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