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For more information, please see the FAQ at <https://trac.ietf.org/trac/gen/wiki/GenArtfaq>. Document: draft-atarius-dispatch-meid-urn-as-instanceid-05.txt Reviewer: Francis Dupont Review Date: 20171124 IETF LC End Date: 20171208 IESG Telechat date: unknown Summary: Ready Major issues: None Minor issues: None Nits/editorial comments: - ToC page 2 and 11 page 7: Acknowledgements -> Acknowledgments - 1 page 2: please expand abbrev in at the first use in the body for URN (optional as it is a well known abbrev according to https://www.rfc-editor.org/materials/abbrev.expansion.txt), NSS and MEID. - 1 page 2: please mark the RFC 5626 quote as a quote (e.g., in its own paragraph with a few spaces more for indentation. - 2 page 3: RFC 2119 was updated by RFC 8174 (note the RFC Editor will update this section if you don't) - 5 page 4: UAC abbrev was not introduces: I believe it stands for User Agent Client (so it is bad practice but the text is not ambiguous) - 9 page 6: I suggest to remove the comma in "Entities that log the instance-id, need ..." (but if you prefer to keep it I shan't object) - 9 page 6: IPSec -> IPsec - 11.1 [5] page 7: RFC 2119 -> 8174 Regards [email protected] _______________________________________________ Gen-art mailing list [email protected] https://www.ietf.org/mailman/listinfo/gen-art
