Hi Elwyn, Thanks for your review! See inline.
Nits/editorial comments: >s1, para 2: s/TLS protocol/The TLS protocol/ (as per RFC 4572) I will fix as suggested. >s4, para 2: s/a new protocol identifier/the protocol identifier/ (it >isn't new any more) I am happy to remove ³new², but doesn¹t ³a² still sound better than ³the²? >s5.1: Suggest s/m- line/"m" line/ for consistency with s3.4 I will replace with single quotes (Œm¹), for consistency with s3.4 and s4. >s5.1, para 1: s/e.g./e.g.,/ I will fix as suggested. >s5.1, para 4: s/that each used certificate matches/that each >certificate used matches/ I will fix as suggested. >s5.1, para 5: s/each used certificate matches/each certificate used >matches/ I will fix as suggested. >s8, para 5: ' This specification creates a new IANA registry named >"Hash Function Textual Names".' >The registry is no longer new. Perhaps s/creates a new IANA >registry/takes over the IANA registry from RFC 4572/ I suggest: "This specification takes over the IANA registry named "Hash Function Textual Names², that was created in RFC 4572. It will not be part of the SDP Parameters.² Regards, Christer _______________________________________________ Gen-art mailing list Gen-art@ietf.org https://www.ietf.org/mailman/listinfo/gen-art
