Thanks for the reviews & fixes! Jari
On 04 Aug 2016, at 17:57, Meral Shirazipour <meral.shirazip...@ericsson.com> wrote: > Hi, > Many thanks. > > Best, > Meral > > From: Pal Martinsen (palmarti) [mailto:palma...@cisco.com] > Sent: Wednesday, August 03, 2016 11:55 PM > To: Meral Shirazipour <meral.shirazip...@ericsson.com> > Cc: draft-ietf-ice-dualstack-fairness....@tools.ietf.org; gen-art@ietf.org > Subject: Re: Gen-ART Last Call review of draft-ietf-ice-dualstack-fairness-03 > > > On 05 Jul 2016, at 17:46, Meral Shirazipour <meral.shirazip...@ericsson.com> > wrote: > > I am the assigned Gen-ART reviewer for this draft. The General Area Review > Team (Gen-ART) reviews all IETF documents being processed by the IESG for the > IETF Chair. Please treat these comments just like any other last call > comments. > > For more information, please see the FAQ at > <http://wiki.tools.ietf.org/area/gen/trac/wiki/GenArtfaq>. > > > Document: draft-ietf-ice-dualstack-fairness-03 > Reviewer: Meral Shirazipour > Review Date: 2016-07-05 > IETF LC End Date: 2016-07-08 > IESG Telechat date: NA > > > Summary: > This draft is ready to be published as BCP RFC but I have some comments. > > Major issues: > > Minor issues: > > Nits/editorial comments: > -[Page 2], “arguable be better"---->"arguably be better" > Fixed > > -[Page 2], “types know"---->"types known" > Fixed > > -[Page 8], Section 7.1 and 7.2 have the same title, is that by choice? > Sort of. Theee sections are implementation details and will be removed in the > published RFC. > > > -[Page 9], Section 10.1, first reference ([I-D.ietf-ice-rfc5245bis])to be > updated to latest version. > -Also on [Page 4] Reference to “section 4.1.2.1" of > [I-D.ietf-ice-rfc5245bis], it would be good to list the section title too (in > case the numbering changes in the final version). > Good point. Fixed. > > > New version uploaded. It also contains fixes from the secdir review. > > .-. > Pål-Erik > > > > Best Regards, > Meral > --- > Meral Shirazipour > Ericsson Research > www.ericsson.com > > _______________________________________________ > Gen-art mailing list > Gen-art@ietf.org > https://www.ietf.org/mailman/listinfo/gen-art
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