Thank you very much for the review, Jouni! Authors, do you have observed these comments?
Jari On 30 Nov 2015, at 05:46, Jouni <jouni.nos...@gmail.com> wrote: > I am the assigned Gen-ART reviewer for this draft. For background on Gen-ART, > please see the FAQ at > <http://wiki.tools.ietf.org/area/gen/trac/wiki/GenArtfaq>. > > Please resolve these comments along with any other Last Call comments you may > receive. > > Document: draft-ietf-tls-cached-info-20 > Reviewer: Jouni Korhonen > Review Date: 2015-11-29 > IETF LC End Date: 2015-12-04 > IESG Telechat date: 2015-12-17 > > > Summary: > -------- > > Ready for publication with some nits. > > Comments: > --------- > > The document was good read and easy to understand. > > Minor issues/nits: > ------------------ > > * IDnits spits out some warning & comments that all seem to be bogus. > However, the normative reference to RFC 4634 needs to be replaced with RFC > 6234. > > * The document describes in few places how the mechanisms specified > extends/updates the Certificate and CertificateRequest structures. So maybe > the draft should also state that in its boilerplate “Updates: 5246, 7250” ? > > * Line 99: s/its’/its > > * Line 164: s/data\.\./data\. > > * Section 5 talks about “input data” for the hash & fingerprint calculation. > What the “input data” exactly is becomes obvious after reading the Appendix > A. However, for non-TLS WG activist it was not obvious from the first sight. > Suggest adding a forward reference to Appendix A example. > > * Section 6 uses [0], [1], .. [4]. While these are perfectly correct they can > be mixed with references in the first sight -> few seconds of confusion ;) I > would suggest using (0), .. (4). > > * The document uses referencing all styles “RFC 7250 [RFC7250]”, “RFC 7250” > and “[RFC7250]”. Pick one. > > * It is unclear to me what happens & what are the procedures when two > different “input data”s generate the same fingerprint. > _______________________________________________ > Gen-art mailing list > Gen-art@ietf.org > https://www.ietf.org/mailman/listinfo/gen-art
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