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Document:
draft-ietf-bess-mvpn-extranet-04.txt
Reviewer: Christer
Holmberg
Review Date: 1 December 2015
IETF LC End Date: 4 December 2015
IETF Telechat Date: 17 December 2015
Summary: The document is well written, and almost ready for
publication. However, I have some general editorial comments that I'd like the
authors to address.
Major Issues: None
Minor Issues: None
Editorial Issues:
General:
QG_1:
Throughout the document, there are places where the text say "We follow", "We
say", etc. I suggest to talk about the "document" instead of "We".
I also wonder whether all the "We says are needed.
QG_2:
The Abstract says that the document updates RFCs 6513, 6514, and 6625. However,
there is no dedicated section(s) which defines the updates.
I also think the Introduction should contain some general overview text on what
is updated.
If possible, it would also be good to have dedicated "Updates to RFC XXXX"
chapters, so that people can easily find what exactly has been updated.
QG_3:
The Abstract and Introduction say "Previous RFCs". I suggest to list the
relevant RFCs instead.
Something like:
"RFC 6513 and RFC6514 specify the procedures..."
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