Thank you! -----Original Message----- From: Fernando Gont [mailto:[email protected]] Sent: Monday, November 12, 2012 1:43 PM To: Moriarty, Kathleen Cc: [email protected]; [email protected]; [email protected] Subject: Re: Gen-art review of draft-gont-intarea-obsolete-eid-option-01
HI, Kathleen, Thnas so much for your feedback. Please find my responses in-line... On 10/25/2012 05:36 PM, Moriarty, Kathleen wrote: > Summary: The document needs a few small revisions. This document > formally deprecates the IPv6 Endpoint Identification (EID) option > (hex value 0x8a). FWIW, I'll update the title to note that this in an IPv6 option. > Major issues: > > Minor issues: RFC2119 is referenced, but not used. I don't see the > use of any RFC2119 language in the document, so it may be safe to > remove this reference. Will do. > I don't think the reference for EID option is valid. I also looked > at the reference in the IANA page and that no longer contains a link. > From a google search, it looks like this was an internet draft that > was never published as an RFC and expired, > http://ana-3.lcs.mit.edu/~jnc/nimrod/eidoption.txt Listing it as "A > work in progress" when it is an expired draft s not appropriate. Ok, I will update this references as indicated. > Nits/editorial comments: > > I recommend changing the following portion of the abstract to state > what is accomplished in this draft as the language is a little > confusing: "possibly serving as a basis for providing advice" Since > this draft doesn't actually provide the advice, just says it may > provide a basis for providing the advice, I would recommend leaving > this out of the abstract. I've already applied such change -- thanks! > Recommend removing "e.g." fromt he last sentence int he Security > Considerations section as it is not needed. Change from: "However, > formally deprecating this option may serve as a basis for e.g. > providing advice about filtering packets containing such option (in a > similar way to [I-D.ietf-opsec-ip-options-filtering] for the IPv4 > case)." TO: "However, formally deprecating this option may serve as a > basis for providing advice about filtering packets containing such > option (in a similar way to [I-D.ietf-opsec-ip-options-filtering] for > the IPv4 case)." I've removed such sentence altogether, upon suggestion by Wes Eddy. Thanks! Best regards, -- Fernando Gont SI6 Networks e-mail: [email protected] PGP Fingerprint: 6666 31C6 D484 63B2 8FB1 E3C4 AE25 0D55 1D4E 7492 _______________________________________________ Gen-art mailing list [email protected] https://www.ietf.org/mailman/listinfo/gen-art
