I am the assigned Gen-ART reviewer for this draft. For background on Gen-ART, please see the FAQ at
<http://wiki.tools.ietf.org/area/gen/trac/wiki/GenArtfaq>. Please resolve these comments along with any other Last Call comments you may receive. Document: draft-ietf-v6ops-ivi-icmp-address-06.txt Reviewer: Francis Dupont Review Date: 20120920 IETF LC End Date: 20120925 IESG Telechat date: unknown Summary: Ready Major issues: None Minor issues: None Nits/editorial comments: In general the language itself could be improved even there is nothing which is hard to understand (i.e., it is a comment only on the form). I suggest to get some help from English native authors or to leave this to the RFC Editor... - 3 page 3: an non-IPv4- -> a non-IPv4- - 3 page 3: (style) bound for to (I suggest "sent to") - 3.1 page 3: uRPF -> unicast reverse path forwarding (uRPF) (note: uRPF is in the RFC Editor abbrev list but not as "well known") - 3.1 page 3: (style) origination (I suggest "origin" or "source") - 3.2 page 4: a question (vs a comment): is RFC 5837 widely supported? - 8 page 5: Henrik Levkowetz is included twice - 9.1 page 5: BCP 84 is included as a normative reference? (I have no concern but I'd like to warn this point is questionable) - 9.2 page 6: I am not sure ISO IS 3166 codes are appropriate in postal addresses, so CN -> China? Regards [email protected] _______________________________________________ Gen-art mailing list [email protected] https://www.ietf.org/mailman/listinfo/gen-art
