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Document: draft-ietf-v6ops-wireline-incremental-ipv6
Reviewer: Peter McCann
Review Date: 2012-08-27
IETF LC End Date: 2012-08-27
IESG Telechat date: 2012-08-30
Summary: Ready
Major issues: None
Minor issues: None
Nits/editorial comments:
Section 2:
or is in progress in
deploying IPv6
SHOULD BE:
or is in the process of
deploying IPv6
Section 3.4:
base protocol to delivery
SHOULD BE:
base protocol to deliver
Section 4.1:
improve it's performance
SHOULD BE:
improve its performance
Section 4.2:
will likely
inherent
SHOULD BE:
will likely
inherit
(i.e. DHCPv6, DNSv4, TFTP, TR-069
etc).
SHOULD BE:
(i.e. DHCPv4, DNSv4, TFTP, TR-069
etc).
Section 4.5:
significant about of external content
SHOULD BE:
significant amount of external content
Section 4.6:
host and home network supports
SHOULD BE:
host and home network support
Section 5:
(in percentage relative to IPv4)
SHOULD BE:
(in percentage relative to IPv6)
Section 5.1.2:
where downstream subscriber
often move
SHOULD BE:
where downstream subscribers
often move
Section 5.1.4:
Once
such example may be
SHOULD BE:
One
such example may be
Section 5.4:
subscriber all traffic must traverse
SHOULD BE:
all subscriber traffic must traverse
Section 5.4.1:
limiting the deploy based
SHOULD BE:
limiting the deployed base
Section 5.5.1:
on the subscribers
premise device
SHOULD BE:
on the subscriber
premises device
Section 5.5.2:
removal this undesired legacy behavior
SHOULD BE:
removal of this undesired legacy behavior
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