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Please resolve these comments along with any other Last Call comments you may receive. Document: draft-ietf-xcon-examples-08.txt Reviewer: Francis Dupont Review Date: 20110305 IETF LC End Date: 20110304 IESG Telechat date: unknown Summary: Ready Major issues: None Minor issues: None Nits/editorial comments: - in general there are some pagination issues but they should be solved by the RFC Editor. - ToC page 2 and 12 page 81: Acknowledgements -> Acknowledgments - 2 page 3, 5.2 page 16, 5.3 page 24, 6 page 32, 6.2 page 37 and 7.4 page 70: i.e. -> i.e., - 5 page 11, 5.1 page 13, 6.1 page 34, 6.2 page 36, 6.3 page 40, 6.4 page 44, 6.5 page 44, 7.2 page 59 and 8.1 page 76: e.g. -> e.g., - 5.2 page 19 '6.': conference . -> conference. - 5.3 page 23 and 7.2 page 57: e.g, -> e.g., - 5.3 page 24: flavour -> flavor - 6.2 page 37: "revconly" -> "recvonly" - 6.3 page 42: i. e. -> i.e., - 7.2 page 59: mantained -> maintained - 7.3 page 63: partecipants -> participants - 7.3 page 64: comnpletely -> completely - 8.1 page 75 figure 27: to Bob | -> to Bob | - 8.2 page 77: disconnetting -> disconnecting - 11 page 80: thw -> the (note: it is in a to-be-removed section) - 11 page 80 and 13.2 page 81: RFC2606 reference is used in this to-be-removed-before-publication section and *only* in it (warning). - Authors' addresses page 82: US -> USA Regards [email protected] PS: I can see you use scenarios in place of scenarii but as there are some from Italy in authors if this is fine for them this is fine for me. _______________________________________________ Gen-art mailing list [email protected] https://www.ietf.org/mailman/listinfo/gen-art
