A new version addressing all issues raised during IESG last call has been posted. In fact, only Francis had some minor comments.
http://www.ietf.org/id/draft-ietf-hokey-key-mgm-09.txt Best regards, Katrin > -----Original Message----- > From: [email protected] [mailto:[email protected]] > Sent: Monday, August 03, 2009 4:08 AM > To: [email protected] > Cc: Hoeper Katrin-QWKN37; [email protected]; [email protected] > Subject: review of draft-ietf-hokey-key-mgm-08.txt > > I have been selected as the General Area Review Team (Gen-ART) > reviewer for this draft (for background on Gen-ART, please see > http://www.alvestrand.no/ietf/gen/art/gen-art-FAQ.html). > > Please resolve these comments along with any other Last Call comments > you may receive. > > Document: draft-ietf-hokey-key-mgm-08.txt > Reviewer: Francis Dupont > Review Date: 2009-07-30 > IETF LC End Date: 2009-08-03 > IESG Telechat date: unknown > > Summary: Ready > > Major issues: None > > Minor issues: > I understand this specification is very abstract about on wire entities > (for instance there is nothing about encoding, etc) but this can become > an issue about key labels, i.e., the reader has to read the (referenced) > RFC 5295 if (s)he wants to know what are exactly these key labels > (note the term "label" can denote many different things). > I suggest to be lightly more reader friendly, for instance by writing > the RFC 5295 establishes a IANA registry for "USRK Key Labels" too: > for the specification of key labels -> ... and associated IANA registry. > > Nits/editorial comments: > [Usual RFC Editor style stuff] > > - ToC page 3 and 8 page 11: Acknowledgements -> Acknowledgments > > - 1 page 4 and 6.1 page 10: e.g. -> e.g., > > - 1 page 4, 2 page 5, 4 page 7 and 6.1 page 10: i.e. -> i.e., > > - 6.2 pages 10 and 11: (suggestion) a RK -> an RK > > - I give up about: handover -> hand-over > > - 4 page 7 and 4.2 page 9: (suggestion) roundtrip -> round-trip > > Regards > > [email protected] _______________________________________________ Gen-art mailing list [email protected] https://www.ietf.org/mailman/listinfo/gen-art
