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Please wait for direction from your document shepherd or AD before posting a new version of the draft. Document: draft-ietf-mipshop-mis-ps-05 Reviewer: Vijay K. Gurbani Review Date: 6 Dec 2007 IESG Telechat date: 10 Dec 2007 Summary: This draft is ready for publication as an Informational. Some nits below. - S1: Consider changing the heading of bullet item 1 as follows: OLD: The Information: the information elements being exchanged. NEW: The Information Exchange: the information elements being exchanged. Rationale: In Figures 1-3, you use the label "Information Exchange". This label ties in nicely with the modified text above. - S3, first paragraph, first line: s/in the introduction mobility/in the introduction, mobility - S3, second paragraph, first line: s/In this document the/In this document, the - S4.3, Figure 3: Should the label "Transport" be "Transport over IP"? Thanks, - vijay -- Vijay K. Gurbani, Bell Laboratories, Alcatel-Lucent 2701 Lucent Lane, Rm. 9F-546, Lisle, Illinois 60532 (USA) Email: [EMAIL PROTECTED],bell-labs.com,acm.org} WWW: http://www.alcatel-lucent.com/bell-labs _______________________________________________ Gen-art mailing list [email protected] https://www1.ietf.org/mailman/listinfo/gen-art
