Looks really good in general. Great work!
Some smaller grammar things that stood out to me below inline:
On 2016-04-27 00:03, Nuritzi Sanchez wrote:
April 27, 2016
The GNOME Foundation welcomes ARM device donations
ORINDA, CA. Recently,
This sounds formal. Later the text switches to a slightly less formal tone.
the GNOME Foundation sent out a request seeking donations of ARM build
server hardware so that the GNOME project
This uses the GNOME Foundation and the GNOME Project in 3rd person.
Later it switches to "We" (without properly introducing who We is) and
uses this for the majority of the text, to then switch back to the 3rd
person at the end of the text again.
This machine is already being hosted in the Red Hat Phoenix datacenter
where other GNOME servers are located.
It's possible to cut "being" out of the last paragraph I think.
*Codethink & Endless*
Paul Sherwood from Codethink reached out to us offering us several
blades at Codethink’s HP Moonshot system hosted by them in the UK.
Endless is sponsoring a project with Codethink to use this hardware to
make xdg-app runtime, SDK and app builds for ARM.
"on Codethink's HP Moonshot system"
*Qualcomm*
Manik Taneja and Victor Ruiz from Canonical reached out to Ketal
Gandhi at Qualcomm about GNOME’s need for ARM hardware. Gandhi was
able to have Qualcomm donate four Dragonboard 410c Single Board
Computers from the 96boards project. These boards will provide a great
platform for application developers who want to test their apps in ARM.
*Other Offers*
The Foundation would like to give its thanks to several other people
who offered help:
– Arc Riley who kindly offered rack space
– Michael Larabel from Phoronix who offered a lot of unused PandaBoards
– Kevin Fenzi from Fedora who offered hardware from the Fedora
infrastructure
– Mikael Frykholm from Tranquillity Hosting offering us rack space
– David Tischler from miniNodes.com offering to buy Raspberry Pi 3s
for us if needed
needs to use "offered" consistently. Mixes "offered" and "offering" now.
– Yann Leger from scaleway.com <http://scaleway.com> who committed to
offering ARM servers in the future
"Committed to offer" I think
ARM support will be added initially to the sdk.gnome.org
<http://sdk.gnome.org> initiative where binary releases of the GNOME
platform and applications will be built. End-users and developers can
use the results on a wide variety of Linux systems, running inside
xdg-app sandboxes. Later, the GNOME project also hopes to add ARM
support to the GNOME Continuous project, so that the latest
development versions of the whole GNOME desktop will also be built and
tested on ARM systems.
"also be" can be cut.
- Andreas
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