Lars Eggert has entered the following ballot position for
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# GEN AD review of draft-ietf-dnsop-alt-tld-23

CC @larseggert

Thanks to Behcet Sarikaya for the General Area Review Team (Gen-ART) review
(https://mailarchive.ietf.org/arch/msg/gen-art/1LB6_ujGseyZRWPgTQZrP2pS8zk).

## Comments

### DOWNREFs

DOWNREF `[RFC8244]` from this Proposed Standard to Informational `RFC8244`.
(For IESG discussion. It seems this DOWNREF was not mentioned in the Last Call
and also seems to not appear in the DOWNREF registry.)

I think RFC8244 could be cited informatively?

## Nits

All comments below are about very minor potential issues that you may choose to
address in some way - or ignore - as you see fit. Some were flagged by
automated tools (via https://github.com/larseggert/ietf-reviewtool), so there
will likely be some false positives. There is no need to let me know what you
did with these suggestions.

### Grammar/style

#### Section 2, paragraph 7
```
 performing aggressive use of DNSSEC- validated caches (described in [RFC8198
                              ^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^
```
This word seems to be formatted incorrectly. Consider fixing the spacing or
removing the hyphen completely.

#### Section 2, paragraph 8
```
will cover all names under .alt. Currently deployed projects and protocols t
                                 ^^^^^^^^^
```
A comma may be missing after the conjunctive/linking adverb "Currently".

#### Section 7.1, paragraph 2
```
and P. Hoffman, "DNS Query Name Minimisation to Improve Privacy", RFC 9156,
                                ^^^^^^^^^^^^
```
Do not mix variants of the same word ("minimisation" and "minimization") within
a single text.

## Notes

This review is in the ["IETF Comments" Markdown format][ICMF], You can use the
[`ietf-comments` tool][ICT] to automatically convert this review into
individual GitHub issues. Review generated by the [`ietf-reviewtool`][IRT].

[ICMF]: https://github.com/mnot/ietf-comments/blob/main/format.md
[ICT]: https://github.com/mnot/ietf-comments
[IRT]: https://github.com/larseggert/ietf-reviewtool



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