If it's not too late and if you don't mind, I'd like to fix grammar and semantics here:
On 19.09.2019 13:33, Matthias Seidel wrote: > Hi Michael, > > Small corrections inside: > > Am 17.09.19 um 09:57 schrieb Dr. Michael Stehmann: >> Hello, >> >> we are planning to join next FOSDEM like we did in the past. To get a >> booth (stand) we have to write a request. The deadline for this request >> will come soon. >> >> Among other things we have to answer two questions. With help from Peter >> I sketched a text for this purpose. >> >> Feel free to criticize this draft: >> >> """ >> Description of project(s) for publication: >> >> Apache OpenOffice is the Free and Open Productivity Suite to handle >> office tasks. The roots of Apache OpenOffice go back more than twenty >> years, creating a mature and powerful product. > Apache OpenOffice is a Free and Open Productivity Suite to handle > office tasks. The roots of Apache OpenOffice go back more than twenty > years, creating a mature and powerful product. Not "... creating a mature ..." but "... making it a mature ...". You don't "create" a mature product by starting it 20 years ago, but being 20 years old could (potentially, YMMV) "make" it mature. >> The software looks and feels familiar and is instantly usable by anyone >> who has used a competitive product. It has many millions of users and >> still millions of downloads each year. > The software looks and feels familiar and is instantly usable by anyone > who has used a competitive product. It has many millions of users and > still millions of downloads every year. If you're going full marketroid, at least don't say "... used a competitive product" but "... used a *competing* product." (Or even better, "similar" instead of "competing" to avoid the horrible marketroiderism.) Saying other products are "competitive" implies that AOO is not. Perish the thought. -- Brane P.S.: Yes, I am extremely allergic to marketspeak, but if you really want to use it, might as well get it right. --------------------------------------------------------------------- To unsubscribe, e-mail: dev-unsubscr...@openoffice.apache.org For additional commands, e-mail: dev-h...@openoffice.apache.org
