Thanks. Changes noted and I'll use the suggestions for future edits. Now I understand the process better I will start on another section.
Regards Carey On 09/01/2015 8:22 PM, "Raphael Hertzog" <[email protected]> wrote: > Hi Carey, > > sorry for the delay of my answer. > > On Sun, 28 Dec 2014, Carey Walker wrote: > > Here's a first attempt. Just one appendix for now. 99% style/readability > - > > haven't attempted anything much technical. > > It's good! I have merged it with a few fixes: > > > @@ -123,8 +123,8 @@ Documents Music Public</computeroutput> > > <replaceable>file</replaceable> with > > “<replaceable>text</replaceable>” as its contents. Adding a line > > at the end of this file is possible too, with a command such as > > - <command>echo "<replaceable>line</replaceable>" > > - >><replaceable>file</replaceable></command>.</para> > > + <command>echo "<replaceable>moretext</replaceable>" > > + >><replaceable>file</replaceable></command>. Note the >> in > this example.</para> > > ">>" should have been ">>" and possibly marked with some > tag: <literal>>></literal> > > > @@ -288,7 +288,8 @@ tmpfs 514208 269136 245072 > 53% /dev/shm > > <listitem> > > <para><filename>/proc/</filename> and <filename>/sys/</filename> > > are specific to the Linux kernel (and not part of the FHS). They > > - are used by the kernel for exporting data to user-space.</para> > > + are used by the kernel for exporting data to user-space > > + (see the section following for a description of the User > Space).</para> > > </listitem> > > Here you should put a real cross-reference link: > (see <xref linkend="sect.userspace-presentation" /> and <xref > linkend="sect.user-space" /> for explanations about this > concept) > > > - <para>The restriction described here is only a corner > > - case. The actual restriction is that there can only be one > > + <para>The limitation described above of only one process being > able to run > > + at a time, doesn't always apply. The actual restriction is that > there can only be one > > Try to wrap lines at 80 characters. > > > <para>For more complex communications, there are also mechanisms > > allowing a process to open access, or share, part of its > > - allocated memory to other processes. Memory shared between them > > - can be used to move data across.</para> > > + allocated memory to other processes. Memory now shared between > them > > + can be used to move data beteen the processes.</para> > > s/beteen/between/ > > Cheers, > -- > Raphaël Hertzog ◈ Debian Developer > > Support Debian LTS: http://www.freexian.com/services/debian-lts.html > Learn to master Debian: http://debian-handbook.info/get/ >
