Alexander Reichle-Schmehl wrote: > Attached you'll find the current draft for the announcement of > "etch-and-a-half". Please review it;
Patch attached.
Mostly null grammar changes. I also replaced the reference to "update
against ftp.debian.org" to "update against a Debian mirror" as using
ftp.debian.org as a mirror is deprecated.
Regards,
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Chris Lamb, UK [EMAIL PROTECTED]
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--- 20080726.wml.orig 2008-07-26 15:30:39.000000000 +0100 +++ 20080726.wml 2008-07-26 16:13:20.000000000 +0100 @@ -33,17 +33,17 @@ <p>Please note that this update does not constitute a new version of Debian GNU/Linux 4.0 but only updates some of the packages included. Even if you need new drivers during installation time there is no need to throw away 4.0 CDs or -DVDs. If you don't need newer drivers you'll only to update against -ftp.debian.org after an installation, in order to incorporate those late +DVDs. If you do not need newer drivers you will only need to update against a +Debian mirror after an installation in order to incorporate these late changes.</p> -<p>Those who frequently install updates from security.debian.org won't have -to update many packages and most updates from security.debian.org are -included in this update.</p> +<p>Those who frequently install updates from security.debian.org will not have +to update many packages as most updates from security.debian.org are included +in this update.</p> <p>New CD and DVD images containing updated packages and the regular -installation media accompanied with the package archive respectively -will be available soon at the regular locations.</p> +installation media accompanied with the package archive will be available +soon at the regular locations.</p> <p>Upgrading to this revision online is usually done by pointing the aptitude (or apt) package tool (see the sources.list(5) manual page) to @@ -91,10 +91,10 @@ <h2>Debian-Installer Update</h2> -<p>Due to changes regarding creating of ssl certificates used during -installation via the network-console the Debian-Installer got updated, -too. Two other issues regarding installation on already existing RAID -setups and recognizing PowerPC64 system have been fixed, too.</p> +<p>The Debian-Installer was also updated due to changes regarding the creation +of SSL certificates used during installation via the network-console. Two other +issues regarding installation on existing RAID setups and recognizing PowerPC64 +systems have also been fixed.</p> <h2>Miscellaneous Bugfixes</h2> @@ -137,7 +137,7 @@ <correction znc "Fix NULL pointer deferences leading to crashes"> </table> -<p>These packages got updated on the named architecture, to bring the architectures back in sync:</p> +<p>These packages were updated on the specified architecture to bring the architectures back in sync:</p> <table border=0> <tr><th>Package</th> <th>Architecture — Reason</th></tr> <correction apache2-mpm-itk "s390 amd64 sparc powerpc arm i386 mips ia64 alpha mipsel hppa — Rebuild against updated apache2"> @@ -266,7 +266,7 @@ </table> <p>A complete list of all accepted and rejected packages together with -rationale is on the preparation page for this revision:</p> +rationale is available on the preparation page for this revision:</p> <div class="center"> <url "http://release.debian.org/stable/<release>/<revision>/"> @@ -276,7 +276,7 @@ <h2>Removed packages</h2> -<p>The following packages got removed due to circumstances beyond our control:</p> +<p>The following packages were removed due to circumstances beyond our control:</p> <table border=0> <tr><th>Package</th> <th>Reason</th></tr> <correction glimpse "Licensing issues">
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