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# IESG review of draft-ietf-bess-evpn-unequal-lb-33

CC @MikeBishop

This is outside my area of technology expertise, so it's entirely possible some
of my comments can be dismissed on that basis.

## Comments

### Section 4.1, paragraph 9

How do endpoints negotiate their awareness of this OPTIONAL value, or
advertise support for new values defined in the future?

### Section 4.1.1, paragraph 3

Given that these messages will not arrive and be processed
simultaneously on all routes, it might be worth mentioning that "inconsistency"
might be a normal and transient state -- if it's been received on one but not
all yet, or if it's in the process of switching from one unit to another.

## Nits

All comments below are about very minor potential issues that you may choose to
address in some way - or ignore - as you see fit. Some were flagged by
automated tools (via https://github.com/larseggert/ietf-reviewtool), so there
will likely be some false positives. There is no need to let me know what you
did with these suggestions.

### Typos

#### "BESS", paragraph 0
```
- Updates: RFC8584 (if approved)                             Cisco Systems
-          ---
```

You don't need the "RFC" before the number in the header.

### URLs

These URLs point to tools.ietf.org, which has been taken out of service:

 * https://tools.ietf.org/html/draft-ietf-idr-link-bandwidth-19.txt

These URLs in the document did not return content:

 *
 
http://www.ietf.org/internet-drafts/draft-ietf-bess-evpn-per-mcast-flow-df-election-13.txt

### Grammar/style

#### Section 5.1, paragraph 1
```
-    generalized weight.  New EVPN link bandwidth extended community
-                         ^
+    generalized weight.  The new EVPN link bandwidth extended community
+                         ^^^^^
```

#### Section 5.1, paragraph 2
```
-    EVPN link bandwidth extended community MUST NOT be attached to per-
+    The EVPN link bandwidth extended community MUST NOT be attached to per-
+   ++++
```

#### Section 6.2, paragraph 3
```
ability of being DF in proportion to it's relative bandwidth within an ES. As
                                     ^^^^
```
Did you mean "its" (possessive pronoun) instead of "it's" (short for "it is")?

#### Section 6.3.2, paragraph 6
```
-    This essentially results in number of candidate HRW hash computations
+    This essentially results in a number of candidate HRW hash computations
+                               ++
```

#### Section 7.2, paragraph 1
```
hts are assigned to each PE in a consistent manner. * When a generalized wei
                            ^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^
```
Consider replacing this phrase with the adverb "consistently" to avoid
wordiness.



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