Hi Erik,

Thanks for your thorough review.
I have submitted the -12 revision that addresses your comments and fixes the 
reference error pointed out by Eric Vyncke.

Jeffrey


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## Nits

### S2.1

* The first paragraph does not read like a normal part of the text flow.
  Maybe just some parentheses around it might help.

### S2.2.2.1

* "from those a few" -> "from those few"?

### S3.2

* s/mpls/MPLS/



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