Tim,

This is a reminder that we await word from you regarding the questions below 
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Thank you.
RFC Editor/ar

> On Jul 3, 2025, at 5:51 PM, rfc-edi...@rfc-editor.org wrote:
> 
> Greetings,
> 
> While reviewing this document during AUTH48 
> (https://www.rfc-editor.org/authors/rfc9818.html and other formats), please 
> resolve the following questions, which are also in the XML file.
> 
> 1) <!-- [rfced] How may this title be rephrased for clarity? 
> Also, is "LAN" needed in this title? (Neither "LAN" nor "local" is mentioned
> in the abstract.) Do either of these options convey the intended meaning?
> Please feel free to suggest otherwise.
> 
> Original:
>  IPv6 CE Routers LAN DHCPv6 Prefix Delegation
> 
> Current:
>  IPv6 Customer Edge (CE) Routers LAN DHCPv6 Prefix Delegation
> 
> Option A:
>  DHCPv6 Prefix Delegation on IPv6 Customer Edge (CE) Routers in LANs
> 
> Option B:
>  DHCPv6 Prefix Delegation in LANs for IPv6 Customer Edge (CE) Routers 
> -->
> 
> 
> 2) <!--[rfced] For clarity, how may this be rephrased? In particular,
> the phrase "CE Router supporting prefix delegation" is unclear.
> 
> Original:
>   The default configuration of CE Router supporting
>   prefix delegation is designed to be a flat model to support zero
>   configuration networking.
> 
> Perhaps:
>   For prefix delegation that supports CE routers, the default 
>   configuration is designed to be a flat model to support
>   zero-configuration networking.
> 
> Or simply:
>   For prefix delegation that supports CE routers, the default 
>   configuration is a flat model to support zero-configuration 
>   networking.
> -->
> 
> 
> 3) <!--[rfced] Please clarify "multi-provisioned networks". Is there 
> another term that is more common? The term "multi-provisioned" 
> does not appear in past RFCs or current Internet-Drafts.
> 
> Original:
>   This document does not cover dealing with multi-provisioned networks
>   with more than one provider. 
> -->
> 
> 
> 4) <!--[rfced] Which update do you prefer, as this definition is missing 
> 'the', 
> but perhaps you prefer to match the cited document?
> 
> Original:  IPv6 node: A device that implements IPv6 protocol.
> 
> Option A:  IPv6 node: A device that implements IPv6.
>   (to match RFC 8200, which is cited in the lead-in text)
> 
> Option B:  IPv6 node: A device that implements the IPv6 protocol.
> -->
> 
> 
> 5) <!-- [rfced] FYI, for expanding GUA, "Unique" has been changed to 
> "Unicast" in order to match RFC 4291. Please review.
> 
> Original:
>   *  GUA:Global Unique Addresses, as defined in [RFC4291].
> 
> Current:
>   GUA:  Global Unicast Address, as defined in [RFC4291].
> -->
> 
> 
> 6) <!--[rfced] Please clarify; how should this fragment be updated to 
> be a sentence?
> 
> Original:
>   The end-user network for IPv6 that is a stub network.
> -->
> 
> 
> 7) <!--[rfced] Please review this update for accuracy; due to "its", 
> the subject ("IPv6 CE routers") has been changed to singular. It 
> currently reads that a single router could have more than one LAN interface.
> 
> Original:
>   LPD-1:   IPv6 CE routers MUST support IPv6 prefix assignment
>            according to Section 13.3 of [RFC8415] (Identity Association
>            for Prefix Delegation (IA_PD) option) on its LAN
>            interface(s).
> 
> Current:
>   LPD-1:   Each IPv6 CE router MUST support IPv6 prefix assignment
>            according to Section 13.3 of [RFC8415] (Identity Association
>            for Prefix Delegation (IA_PD) option) on its LAN
>            interface(s).
> 
> Alternatively (both plural):
>   LPD-1:   IPv6 CE routers MUST support IPv6 prefix assignment
>            according to Section 13.3 of [RFC8415] (Identity Association
>            for Prefix Delegation (IA_PD) option) on their LAN
>            interfaces.
> -->
> 
> 
> 8) <!--[rfced] Because the second sentence is singular, should the first 
> sentence be parallel?
> 
> Original:
>   LPD-2:   IPv6 CE routers MUST assign a prefix from the delegated
>            prefix as specified by L-2 in Section 4.3 of [RFC7084].  If
>            insufficient prefixes are available the IPv6 CE Router MUST
>            log a system management error.
> 
> Perhaps:
>   LPD-2:   Each IPv6 CE router MUST assign a prefix from the delegated
>            prefix as specified by L-2 in Section 4.3 of [RFC7084].  If
>            insufficient prefixes are available, the IPv6 CE router MUST
>            log a system management error.
> -->
> 
> 
> 9) <!--[rfced] Should "both ULA and GUA" be both "ULAs and GUAs"? If so, 
> please review whether "the GUA" is accurate in the second phrase.
> 
> Original:
>   LPD-9:   If an IPv6 CE router is provisioning both ULA and GUA via
>            prefix delegation, the GUA SHOULD appear first in the DHCPv6
>            packets.
> 
> Perhaps:
>   LPD-9:   If an IPv6 CE router is provisioning both ULAs and GUAs via
>            prefix delegation, the GUA SHOULD appear first in the DHCPv6
>            packets.
> 
> Or (singular):
>   LPD-9:   If an IPv6 CE router is provisioning both the ULA and the GUA via
>            prefix delegation, the GUA SHOULD appear first in the DHCPv6
>            packets.
> -->
> 
> 
> 10) <!--[rfced] Terminology
> 
> a) This term appeared inconsistently and has been updated to the latter.
> Please let us know if you prefer otherwise.
> 
>   CE Router vs. CE router   [based on usage in RFC 7084]
> 
> b) Capitalization of these terms is not consistent. Please let us 
> know your preference.
> 
>   Prefix Delegation vs. prefix delegation
> 
>   Delegated Prefix (in LPD-6) vs. delegated prefix (in LPD-2, LPD-5)
> 
> c) Please review usage of this term and let us know if any updates are needed.
> We note RFC 8415 uses the hyphen for the "prefix-length" field.
> 
>   prefix-length (3 instances) vs. prefix length (2 instances)
> -->
> 
> 
> 11) <!-- [rfced] FYI, the original URL provided for [eRouter] is to the most 
> recent version of this CableLabs specification, Version I22, which was 
> published in May 2024, so we updated the reference as follows.
> 
> Original:
>   [eRouter]  CableLabs, "IPv4 and IPv6 eRouter Specification Version
>              I21", February 2022,
>              <https://www.cablelabs.com/specifications/CM-SP-eRouter>.
> 
> Current:
>   [eRouter]  CableLabs, "IPv4 and IPv6 eRouter Specification", Data-
>              Over-Cable Service Interface Specifications, Version I22,
>              May 2024,
>              <https://www.cablelabs.com/specifications/CM-SP-eRouter>.
> 
> Re: "in Section 8.5 of CableLabs IPv6 eRouter specification [eRouter]",
> we note that Section 8.5 has the same title in I21 and I122.
> However, if you prefer to reference Version I21, please let us know
> (and in that case, we recommend this URL:
> https://www.cablelabs.com/specifications/CM-SP-eRouter?v=I21).
> -->
> 
> 
> Thank you.
> 
> RFC Editor/ar
> 


> On Jul 3, 2025, at 6:01 PM, rfc-edi...@rfc-editor.org wrote:
> 
> Tim,
> 
> One additional question:
> 
> 12) Re: LPD-6, what does "that is not assigned" refer to? As far as verb 
> agreement, it does not match "packets". 
> 
> Original:
>  IPv6 CE routers MUST continue to drop packets
>  including destination address that is not assigned to the
>  LAN or delegated.
> 
> Perhaps:
>  IPv6 CE routers MUST continue to drop packets,
>  including destination address, that are not assigned to the
>  LAN or delegated.
> 
> Thank you.
> RFC Editor/ar


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