Hi Brian,

Thanks for your QUICK replies!  We have some additional questions about terms 
that impact more than one of the three documents making up Cluster 518.  Please 
consider whether updates are needed. 

1) We note that the word "new" was used 26 times in
RFC 9776 and 34 times in RFC 9777; please consider if any instances are
not new and should be removed. For example, the following text
was used in RFCs 3376 and 3810 - is the service interface and its
features still considered "new"?  Please review.

Some examples - see the text for more.

Current
Section 2:
  The equivalent operations in the new service interface follow:

Section 3.2:
  Filtering of packets based upon a socket's multicast reception
  state is a new feature of this service interface.


2) Throughout the text in RFCs 9776, 9777, and 9778, the following 
terminology appears to be used inconsistently. Please review these 
occurrences and let us know if/how they may be made consistent.

Hyphenation: 
 Current-State Record (15) (9776) vs.
 Current-State Group Record (1) (9776) vs.
 Current State Record (15) (9777)

 Filter-Mode-Change Record (9776) vs. Filter Mode Change Record (9777)


Capitalization: 
 General Query (9776 and 9777) vs. General query (9776) vs.
 general query (9776 and 9777)

 Query Message (9778) vs. Query message (9776 and 9777) vs.
 query message (9776 and 9777)

 interface timer (9776) vs.  Interface Timer (9777)

 retransmission timer (9776) vs. Retransmission Timer (9777)

 Source Timer vs. source timer - this term is largely lowercase in the 
 running text but is uppercase in the tables (see Table 10 in RFC 9776 and 
 Table 9 in 9777). 

  Older Version Host Present Timer (9777) vs.
  Older Version Host Present timer (9776 and 9777))
    Note: Please consider if these terms should also have the same case:
       Older Host Present Timer
       Older Host Present Interval
       IGMPv1 Host Present timer

  Older Version Querier Present Timer (9776) vs.
  Older Version Querier Present timer (9776 and 9777)
    [Note: Also consider "Older Version Querier Present Timeout”.]


Hyphenation and capitalization:
  router filter-mode (9776) vs. Router Filter Mode (9777)
  Service Interface (9776) vs. service interface (9777)
  source-change report (9776) vs. Source Change Report (9777)
  Source-List-Change Record (9776) vs. Source List Change Record (9777)
  State-Change Report (9776) vs. State-Change report  (9776) vs. State Change 
Report
(9777)


3) Other terms only have the first occurrence enclosed in quote marks. Should
these terms follow that pattern, or should all occurrences be enclosed
in quote marks?
  leave latency vs. "leave latency"
  fast leave vs. "fast leave”


4) Should "record type" be uppercase in any of the following
instances for consistency, or is lowercase correct per the context?

Record Type vs. record type

Current (9777 and 9776):
  An SSM-aware host
  SHOULD NOT send a MODE_IS_EXCLUDE record type for multicast
  addresses that fall within the SSM address range as they will
  be ignored by SSM-aware routers [RFC4604].

  An SSM-aware SSM-aware
  host SHOULD NOT send a CHANGE_TO_EXCLUDE_MODE record type for
  multicast addresses that fall within the SSM address range.

  SSM-aware routers SHOULD ignore records that contain multicast
  addresses in the SSM address range if the record type is
  MODE_IS_EXCLUDE or CHANGE_TO_EXCLUDE_MODE.

Thank you,
RFC Editor

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