Hi Authors, Jie - Thank you for your quick reply! We have updated the document as requested and your approval has been noted on the AUTH48 status page (see https://www.rfc-editor.org/auth48/rfc9732). All of our questions have been addressed.
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RFC Editor/mc > On Feb 11, 2025, at 12:11 AM, Dongjie (Jimmy) <jie.d...@huawei.com> wrote: > > Hi, > > Thanks for the update, please see replies to the remaining questions inline: > >> -----Original Message----- >> From: Madison Church <mchu...@staff.rfc-editor.org> >> Sent: Tuesday, February 11, 2025 6:58 AM >> To: Dongjie (Jimmy) <jie.d...@huawei.com>; ta-miyas...@kddi.com; >> lizhenqi...@chinamobile.com; younglee...@gmail.com; >> stewart.bry...@gmail.com >> Cc: Megan Ferguson <mfergu...@staff.rfc-editor.org>; teas-...@ietf.org; >> teas-cha...@ietf.org; Lou Berger <lber...@labn.net>; James Guichard >> <james.n.guich...@futurewei.com>; auth48archive@rfc-editor.org; RFC >> Editor <rfc-edi...@rfc-editor.org> >> Subject: Re: AUTH48: RFC-to-be 9732 <draft-ietf-teas-enhanced-vpn-20> for >> your review >> >> Hi Jie and Stewart, >> >> Thank you for your replies. We have updated the document according to >> Jie’s response and have a few followup questions/comments. >> >>>>> 4) <!-- [rfced] Please review the use of RFC 4364 as a reference for >>>>> L3VPN in the following text as we don't see L3VPN or layer 3 in >>>>> that document. >>>>> >>>>> Original: >>>>> Examples of technologies to provide VPN services are: IPVPN >>>>> [RFC2764], L2VPN [RFC4664], L3VPN [RFC4364], and EVPN [RFC7432]. >>> >>> Although it is well known that RFC 4364 is about L3VPN, I agree L3VPN or >> layer-3 is not used explicitly in that document. It uses IP VPN instead. >>> >>> In this draft we can follow that way and replace L3VPN with IP VPN. >> >> 1) Note that we have updated the citation tag for RFC 4364 to appear after >> "IPVPN [RFC2764]". Additionally, should "IPVPN" have a space between "IP" >> and "VPN" based on its use RFCs 2764 and 4364? >> >> Current: >> Examples of technologies to provide VPN services are as follows: IPVPN >> [RFC2764] [RFC4364], L2VPN [RFC4664], and EVPN [RFC7432]. >> >> Perhaps: >> Examples of technologies to provide VPN services are as follows: IP VPN >> [RFC2764] [RFC4364], L2VPN [RFC4664], and EVPN [RFC7432]. > > It is better to align with RFC 2764 and 4364, using IP VPN instead of IPVPN. > > >>>>> >>>>> 12) <!--[rfced] FYI - we have broken this long sentence into a bulleted >>>>> list for the ease of the reader. Please review and ensure we >>>>> have maintained your intended meaning. >>>>> >>>>> Original: >>>>> Based on the set of network resource partitions provided by the >>>>> physical network infrastructure, multiple NRPs can be created, each >>>>> with a set of dedicated or shared network resources allocated from >>>>> the physical underlay network, and each can be associated with a >>>>> customized logical network topology, so as to meet the requirements >>>>> of different enhanced VPN services or different groups of enhanced >>>>> VPN services. >>>>> >>>>> Current: >>>>> Based on the set of network resource partitions provided by the >>>>> physical network infrastructure, multiple NRPs can be created. Each >>>>> of these NRPs: >>>>> >>>>> * has a set of dedicated or shared network resources allocated from >>>>> the physical underlay network, and >>>>> >>>>> * can be associated with a customized logical network topology so as >>>>> to meet the requirements of different enhanced VPN services or >>>>> different groups of enhanced VPN services. >>>>> --> >>> >>> Actually the last sentence "so as to meet the requirements... " is related >>> to >> both bullets. >>> >>> Maybe split it as a separate bullet? >> >> 2) Thank you for your suggestion! We have updated the text as follows. >> Please let us know if any additional changes are needed. >> >> Current: >> Based on the set of network resource partitions provided by the >> physical network infrastructure, multiple NRPs can be created. Each >> of these NRPs: >> >> * has a set of dedicated or shared network resources allocated from >> the physical underlay network, >> >> * can be associated with a customized logical network topology, and >> >> * meets the requirements of different enhanced VPN services or >> different groups of enhanced VPN services. > > This update looks good. I just have one small suggestion for your > consideration: > > Since it is talking about "each NRP", in the last bullet maybe it is better > to replace "different enhanced VPN services" with "a specific enhanced VPN > service", and replace "different groups of enhanced VPN services" with "a > specific group of enhanced VPN services"? > > With these updates, I approve the publication of this document. > > Thanks for all the help! > > Best regards, > Jie > >> >> The updated files have been posted here (please refresh): >> https://www.rfc-editor.org/authors/rfc9732.txt >> https://www.rfc-editor.org/authors/rfc9732.pdf >> https://www.rfc-editor.org/authors/rfc9732.html >> https://www.rfc-editor.org/authors/rfc9732.xml >> >> The diff files have been posted here: >> https://www.rfc-editor.org/authors/rfc9732-diff.html (comprehensive >> diff) >> https://www.rfc-editor.org/authors/rfc9732-rfcdiff.html (side by side) >> https://www.rfc-editor.org/authors/rfc9732-auth48diff.html (AUTH48 >> updates only) >> https://www.rfc-editor.org/authors/rfc9732-auth48rfcdiff.html (side by >> side) >> >> The details of the AUTH48 status of your document are here: >> https://www.rfc-editor.org/auth48/rfc9732 >> >> Thank you, >> RFC Editor/mc -- auth48archive mailing list -- auth48archive@rfc-editor.org To unsubscribe send an email to auth48archive-le...@rfc-editor.org
