Neil,
While reviewing this document during AUTH48, please resolve (as necessary) the
following questions, which are also in the XML file.
1) <!-- [rfced] FYI, we have expanded the abbreviation in the title. Please let
us know if any updates are necessary.
Original:
JMAP for Contacts
Current:
JSON Meta Application Protocol (JMAP) for Contacts
-->
2) <!-- [rfced] Section 2. We're having difficulty parsing the end of the
following sentence. Should the client's UI offer to let the user subscribe?
Original:
If false, the AddressBook and its contents SHOULD only be
displayed when the user explicitly requests it or to offer it for
the user to subscribe to.
Possibly:
If false, the AddressBook and its contents SHOULD only be
displayed when the user explicitly requests it. The UI may
offer to the user the option of subscribing to it.
-->
3) <!-- [rfced] Section 2.3. May we rephrase the following sentence to specify
"the default"?
Original:
As per [RFC8620], Section 5.3, if the default is successfully
changed, any changed objects MUST be reported in either the "created"
or "updated" argument in the response as appropriate, with the
server-set value included.
Perhaps:
As per Section 5.3 of [RFC8620], if the default AddressBook is
successfully changed, any changed objects MUST be reported in either the
"created" or "updated" argument in the response as appropriate with the
server-set value included.
-->
4) <!-- [rfced] May we remove the annotation from the [UNICODE] reference? We
believe the reference is stable enough not to need supporting text.
Current:
[UNICODE] The Unicode Consortium, "The Unicode Standard",
<https://www.unicode.org/versions/latest/>. Note that
this reference is to the latest version of Unicode, rather
than to a specific release. It is not expected that
future changes in the Unicode Standard will affect the
referenced definitions.
Suggested:
[UNICODE] The Unicode Consortium, "The Unicode Standard",
<https://www.unicode.org/versions/latest/>.
-->
5) <!-- [rfced] In the html and pdf outputs, the text enclosed in <tt> is
output in fixed-width font. In the txt output, there are no changes to the
font, and the quotation marks have been removed.
In the html and pdf outputs, the text enclosed in <em> is output in
italics. In the txt output, the text enclosed in <em> appears with an
underscore before and after.
In the html and pdf outputs, the text enclosed in <strong> is output in
bold. In the txt output, the text enclosed in <strong> appears with an
asterisk before and after.
Please review carefully and let us know if the output is acceptable or if
any updates are needed. For example, should <tt>forbidden</tt> SetError be
"forbidden" SetError instead?
-->
6) <!-- [rfced] In the XML file, we updated artwork to sourcecode in Sections
4.1 and 4.2. Please confirm that this is correct.
In addition, please consider whether the "type" attribute of the sourcecode
element has been set correctly to "json".
The current list of preferred values for "type" is available at
<https://www.rfc-editor.org/rpc/wiki/doku.php?id=sourcecode-types>.
If the current list does not contain an applicable type, feel free to
suggest additions for consideration. Note that it is also acceptable
to leave the "type" attribute not set.
-->
7) <!-- [rfced] Should the following instances of "contacts data", "contacts
data model", and "contacts servers", be updated to use the
singular form ("contact data", "contact data model", and "contact servers") for
consistency?
Original (a):
This document specifies a data model for synchronising contacts data
with a server using JMAP.
Perhaps (a):
This document specifies a data model for synchronising contact data
with a server using JMAP.
Original (b):
An Account (see [RFC8620], Section 1.6.2) with support for the
contacts data model contains zero or more AddressBook objects, which
is a named collection of zero or more ContactCards.
Perhaps (b):
An Account (see [RFC8620], Section 1.6.2) with support for the
contact data model contains zero or more AddressBook objects, which is a
named collection of zero or more ContactCards.
Original (c):
Privacy leaks can have real world consequences, and contacts
servers and clients MUST be mindful of the need to keep all data secure.
Perhaps (c):
Privacy leaks can have real world consequences, and contact
servers and clients MUST be mindful of the need to keep all data secure.
-->
8) <!-- [rfced] FYI - We have added expansions for abbreviations upon first use
per Section 3.6 of RFC 7322 ("RFC Style Guide"). Please review each expansion
in the document carefully to ensure correctness.
-->
9) <!-- [rfced] Please review the "Inclusive Language" portion of the online
Style Guide <https://www.rfc-editor.org/styleguide/part2/#inclusive_language>
and let us know if any changes are needed. Updates of this nature typically
result in more precise language, which is helpful for
readers. For example, please consider whether the term "whitespace" should be
updated.
-->
10) <!-- [rfced] We note that the following terms appear inconsistently
throughout the document. Please review each instance and let us know
if we should update.
a) Capitalization
Id vs. id
Principal vs. principal
(Note that RFC 9670 uses the capitalized form of "Principal".)
uid vs. UID
b) Formatting
We see that property names use a mix of formatting styles (with and
without quotes, with and without <tt/>). Note that RFC 8620 uses
quotes around property names. Examples:
id property
"iud" property
<tt>uri</tt> property
Objects also use a mix of formatting styles (with and without
<strong/>). For example:
<strong>AddressBook</strong> object
Media object
-->
Thank you.
RFC Editor/mc/jm
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RFC9610 (draft-ietf-jmap-contacts-10)
Title : JMAP for Contacts
Author(s) : N. Jenkins
WG Chair(s) : Bron Gondwana, Jim Fenton
Area Director(s) : Murray Kucherawy, Orie Steele
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