Hi John, Many thanks for your review and comments. Please see my response for your comments:
>Or at a minimum, just eliminate the paragraph break between the two paragraphs (i.e., merge them into one, even if no other rewrite). > >I also wonder why the first alternative is given as a MAY but the second, as a "may". I will remove the line break and change the second "may" to "MAY". Thanks Mohit On Wed, Apr 26, 2023 at 11:47 AM John Scudder via Datatracker < nore...@ietf.org> wrote: > John Scudder has entered the following ballot position for > draft-ietf-ace-cmpv2-coap-transport-09: No Objection > > When responding, please keep the subject line intact and reply to all > email addresses included in the To and CC lines. (Feel free to cut this > introductory paragraph, however.) > > > Please refer to > https://urldefense.proofpoint.com/v2/url?u=https-3A__www.ietf.org_about_groups_iesg_statements_handling-2Dballot-2Dpositions_&d=DwICaQ&c=V9IgWpI5PvzTw83UyHGVSoW3Uc1MFWe5J8PTfkrzVSo&r=J7DgfMyeL26OZuy8d3qTy_h24Ff1NatxSKMgDUj2Kxg&m=YhakhC62g-Wk6qWM3yS9CNP4Xoqkw-hbW_QxdabMJQXU4uBLvCzqQH4RXaqG-dMM&s=UUnDIHYDmQdXxkQMRwkmrPdzblpjqTlhn9T5UWEa8JI&e= > > for more information about how to handle DISCUSS and COMMENT positions. > > > The document, along with other ballot positions, can be found here: > > https://urldefense.proofpoint.com/v2/url?u=https-3A__datatracker.ietf.org_doc_draft-2Dietf-2Dace-2Dcmpv2-2Dcoap-2Dtransport_&d=DwICaQ&c=V9IgWpI5PvzTw83UyHGVSoW3Uc1MFWe5J8PTfkrzVSo&r=J7DgfMyeL26OZuy8d3qTy_h24Ff1NatxSKMgDUj2Kxg&m=YhakhC62g-Wk6qWM3yS9CNP4Xoqkw-hbW_QxdabMJQXU4uBLvCzqQH4RXaqG-dMM&s=_FEaREWNE06tnQQDvPRXzP8iwgcrOOdVbWngq1suXLU&e= > > > > ---------------------------------------------------------------------- > COMMENT: > ---------------------------------------------------------------------- > > # John Scudder, RTG AD, comments for draft-ietf-ace-cmpv2-coap-transport-09 > CC @jgscudder > > Thanks for this document. I have one minor comment below, which I hope may > be > helpful. > > ## COMMENTS > > ### Section 2.6 > > In the second paragraph below, > > Alternatively, an EE MAY periodically poll for the current status of > the CA via the "PKI Information Request" message, see section 6.5 of > [RFC4210]. If supported, EEs may also use "Support Messages" defined > in section 4.3 of Lightweight CMP Profile > [I-D.ietf-lamps-lightweight-cmp-profile] to get information about the > CA status. > > These mechanisms will help constrained devices, that are acting as > EEs, to conserve resources by eliminating the need to create an > endpoint for receiving notifications from RA or CA. It will also > simplify the implementation of a CoAP-to-HTTP proxy. > > is it right that "these mechanisms" refers to the two mechanisms in the > immediately-preceding paragraph? If so, this isn't clear from how you've > structured the text. One possible rewrite is, > > Two alternatives are first, an EE MAY periodically poll for the > current status of the CA via the "PKI Information Request" message, > see section 6.5 of [RFC4210], or second, if supported, EEs may also > use "Support Messages" defined in section 4.3 of Lightweight CMP > Profile [I-D.ietf-lamps-lightweight-cmp-profile] to get information > about the CA status. These mechanisms will help constrained devices, > that are acting as EEs, to conserve resources by eliminating the need > to create an endpoint for receiving notifications from RA or CA. It > will also simplify the implementation of a CoAP-to-HTTP proxy. > > Or at a minimum, just eliminate the paragraph break between the two > paragraphs > (i.e., merge them into one, even if no other rewrite). > > I also wonder why the first alternative is given as a MAY but the second, > as a > "may". > > ## Notes > > This review is in the ["IETF Comments" Markdown format][ICMF], You can use > the > [`ietf-comments` tool][ICT] to automatically convert this review into > individual GitHub issues. > > [ICMF]: > https://urldefense.proofpoint.com/v2/url?u=https-3A__github.com_mnot_ietf-2Dcomments_blob_main_format.md&d=DwICaQ&c=V9IgWpI5PvzTw83UyHGVSoW3Uc1MFWe5J8PTfkrzVSo&r=J7DgfMyeL26OZuy8d3qTy_h24Ff1NatxSKMgDUj2Kxg&m=YhakhC62g-Wk6qWM3yS9CNP4Xoqkw-hbW_QxdabMJQXU4uBLvCzqQH4RXaqG-dMM&s=YQ2TBQJF5PQrDcxke_4DqQg2FU2-EDTcCNnUd5ii0f4&e= > [ICT]: > https://urldefense.proofpoint.com/v2/url?u=https-3A__github.com_mnot_ietf-2Dcomments&d=DwICaQ&c=V9IgWpI5PvzTw83UyHGVSoW3Uc1MFWe5J8PTfkrzVSo&r=J7DgfMyeL26OZuy8d3qTy_h24Ff1NatxSKMgDUj2Kxg&m=YhakhC62g-Wk6qWM3yS9CNP4Xoqkw-hbW_QxdabMJQXU4uBLvCzqQH4RXaqG-dMM&s=sG2RDmSacE2kpqRrtRjOeLwr0iYhClFHKhEg9Wzxfxk&e= > > > >
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